First Revision

I started revising my first WIP today. As I suspected, I am not able to edit the first one and still accomplish anything. There's just too much to cut out. So, out with the old, and a complete rewrite!

I got about 500 words (one page) done today, but already it's flowing better, and it's accomplishing exactly what I had hoped the revision would. I'm eliminating my info dump and concentrating more on the "show" instead of the "tell". The one thing I haven't been watching for is passive voice, but I may do a quick read through here momentarily just to double check myself.